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長久以來,社會大眾對於學測或指考英文作文部分的評分,希望在教學與考試能有所本,考生或許可預估自己成績等等因素下,「94指定科目英文考科非選擇題研發計畫」特別委託四所高中與一所高職高三學生共約195位,以93年學測或93年指考英文作文為題,撰寫短文以作為樣例使用,並且取得作答學生同意得以將其短文用於相關學術著作、或在研究會議中展示;作答學測考生共94位、指考101位;對於作答結果使用情形,學測同意者共71位、不同意者8位、未填者12位,指考同意者76位、不同意者4位、未填者18位。

邀請多位經驗豐富的閱卷委員對每份試卷進行初、複閱工作,並且與研究小組共同挑選學測與指考評分樣例各9份,撰寫各樣例之得分說明,學測:特優1份、優2份、可3份、差1份、劣2份;指考:特優1份、優1份、可2份、差2份、劣3份。

註:研究人員:劉慶剛(主持人,台北大學)、高照明(台灣大學)、林秀慧(大考中心)、游春琪(大考中心)。

學測英文作文評分樣例

試題:

說明:1. 依提示在「答案卷」上寫一篇英文作文。
    2. 文長120個單詞(words)左右。

提示:請根據以下三張連環圖畫的內容,以"One evening,..."開頭,寫一篇文章,描述圖中主角所經歷的事件,並提供合理的解釋與結局。

樣例

學測編號1:特優-19

One evening, a man named Kris attended a wedding party. It was held in a luxury hotel, where there were a lot of guests.

Everyone talked lively and happily during the meal, including Kris. Being the best friend of the couple, Kris drank a lots in ecstasy because he felt really happy for them.

Later, Kris excused himself and left the party. He stood on the road, waiting for a taxi. But, unfortunately, he drank too much to stay conscious. Upon seeing a car coming to him, Kris waved his arms immediately, saying "Hey, Taxi!" loudly. Then the car stopped. However, Kris wasn´t aware that was a police car, not a taxi!

Kris couldn´t remember anything that had happened during the drive to the police office.He was waken up by a thunderous sound, "What are you doing? Do you know where it is?" said the police officer. Kris was shocked to death but had no reason for explaination.

About 30 minutes later, Kris was allowed to leave. He was ashamed for his "trip to the police office." He appologized to the police officer for his irrational behavior, and promised that he wouldn´t do it again.

說明:主題明確,內容敘述相當具體且完整。重點分明,組織具連貫性。文句富變化,幾無文法錯誤(第二段第二句中a lots,應為a lot。)。詞彙使用妥適,稍有拼字的錯誤(例:第四段句中的explaination與最後一段中的appologized皆為錯字。)。

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學測編號2:優-17

One evening, John was invited to his old friend´s wedding. Meeting so many classmates in university, he became more and more excited. He talked a lot with other, laughed happily, and also, drank a lot.

When it got darker and darker outside, he knew that he had to go home. So much did he drank that he couldn´t even drive home on his own. He then walked on the side of the road and tried to find a taxi to take him home. He waved to the cars, shouted out something, and even ran onto the road with his body turning round. Not long after he did these, here came a car. It stopped in front of him, and he got on the car without hesitation. And soon, he fell asleep.

When he opened his eyes again, he found himself in the police station. To his dismay, he didn´t remember what he had done yesterday. A policeman came up to him and scolded him angrily. He was too embarrassed to look up at him. He really learned a lesson from the impressing mistake.

說明:主題之敘述完整,文意清楚。組織上前後連貫,轉承語使用大致得當;句型雖有變化,文法錯誤少,但仍有用法與拼字錯誤。標點符號亦稍有不當。

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學測編號3:優-16

One evening, I went to one of my friends´ weeding in my black suit. I was happy that he married a nice girl. And I was so excited that I drank too much. On my way home, my head was dazzling and my feet were heavy that I couldn´t walk well. So I gave up walking home, waving my hand to stop a taxi. Though I thought that taxi was strange with the sparking light, I still got into the car and told the driver my address. Then I fell into a deep dream in the taxi. The next morning I woke up, I felt uncomfortable and tried to move my limbs to make myself awake. When I stood up, I found that I was in the police station instead of my bedroom. What happened last night? A policeman pointed at the police car outside and told me "That was the "taxi" you took last night, do you have any problem now?"

說明:主題敘述具體,但內容略嫌不足。句型有變化,偶有文法錯誤。用字尚稱得宜,雖偶有用法與拼字錯誤,但未影響文意之表達。標點符號稍有不當。

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學測編號4:可-14

One evening, there was a wedding party at a fancy hotel. The party´s atmosphere was so happy and all people including the guests and the new couples cheered to each other all night. Later, the party was over and every person was much drank.

The night became darker and darker and there was few cars on the streets. One of the guests was about to go home by taxi, but he was so much drunk that he couldn´t even distinguish the taxi between the police car. He hired the police car and took on. The police asked where he lived patiently, but he just kept smiled without saying any words…

The next morning, the man finally awoke, finding himself sitting in the police office. He was shocked. When the police told him the whole thing, he felt so embarrassed.

說明:主題清楚,但部分相關敘述發展不全,有些語意表達不甚清楚。有文法錯誤,然尚未影響整體文意之表達。拼字及用字有誤,影響部分文意之表達。標點使用稍有不當。

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學測編號5:可-14

One evening, a wedding party was held in a beautiful, nice and high-class resturant . A homeless named Paul walked by and was curious to what was happening inside. He was starving, and was looking for a place to take a rest. The music was turned on so loud, and the food were smelling so good. Paul walked in without thinking.

It was a place full of happiness, grace and the most important thing, food. Paul couldn´t stop himself from putting the food in his mouth though his mouth was already full of food. While he was eating, he saw a bottle of wine.

"1989´s Wiskey…" he said with a voice seemed to be desired of alcohol. Paul was once a man that was usually drunk every moment. That´s the reason why he was a homeless. He spent all his money on it. He started to drink, one by one, the bottle were enough to full a pakage!

The man came out and saw him with anger.

"What the hell do you thing you´re doing here?!" the man cried out. He quickly threw Paul out and trying to fix the mass Paul made.

Paul was already drunk. He didn´t know what was he doing, and even where he was.

A police car came by and saw him. Paul thought it was a taxi and trying to stop it. The car stopped and Paul past out very soon on the car. Ten minutes later, Paul woke up with a started. He was in the police station.

These kind of story have happened very often in these day. People who don´t work or have no work are all marking around on the street. This really caused a great society problem. These things should be avoid in our life because we have a group of police who should be working for the people. Having these kind of questions can dissepear soon.

說明:內容與圖意不甚切合,相關敘述發展不全,部分語意不清楚。組織不夠連貫,最後一段偏離主題,與前文所敘述內容不符。文法及拼字錯誤,影響部分文意之表達;標點使用稍有不當。

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學測編號6:可-11

One evening, my brother dressed himself up in order to attend his friend´s weding. When he arrived at the resturant, he came across a classmate who hadn´t connected with him since he graduated from college. My brother was so happy that he drank a large amount of wine.

After the weding, My brother walked along the street and he wanted to take a taxi. Because my brother war drunk, no driver wanted to let him get on the car. Finally, my brother glazed at a car so he raised his hand and got on it. He fell asleep as soon as he sat. When he wake up, he found he was in police station. How terrible he is!

說明:雖點出主題但不夠明顯。敘述發展不完整,未能連貫發展,重點安排欠妥。部分文法、用字、拼字的錯誤,影響文意之表達。標點偶有錯誤。

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學測編號7:差-6

One evening, he go to a dinner and eat very much, drink very much.So he has a little醉.When the dime in the end, he will go home by heself.He was walking on the road, and he went to took a taxi.But, he was disunderstanding, he took a police car.And then, the police take he to police局.Next day, at 8:00am, he is disunderstanding, why he will in there?The police is talk him, he was have 喝醉 yesterday.So he is very red-face, and then he just real go home.

說明:雖有主題,但相關敘述未能發展;不但文法錯誤多〈時態前後不一〉,用字、拼字錯誤亦多,嚴重影響文意之表達;字數不足,另扣一分。

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 學測編號8:劣-3

One evening the man went to attend friend´s marry ceremony, he drinks a lot of wine, and gulp face to host.The host very angry because he so not polite.

He didn´t know himself act so funny, and wave his hand for police car.The policeman took him to police office.

As a result, the man wake up look the policeman, the policeman very angry said, "Were are you".Do you know?Then man said, I don´t know." "Why I am here?"

說明:內容太少,行文不流暢,因文法、用字、拼字錯誤太多,嚴重影響文意表達。字數不足,另扣一分。

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 學測編號9:劣-2

One evening, a man went to a party.He drinked much CH3COOH and that he felt asleep.When the party was end he want to went home.He took taxi and sleep on the car.What can the driver do?When the man opened his eyes, he saw aand his family.

說明:內容太少,段落發展全無章法。因文法、用字、拼字錯誤多,嚴重影響文意之表達。字數不足,另扣一分。

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指考英文作文評分樣例

試題:

說明:1. 依提示在「答案卷」上寫一篇英文作文。
    2. 文長至少120個單詞。

提示:請以"Travel Is The Best Teacher"為主題,寫一篇至少120個字的英文作文。第一段針對文章主題,說明旅行的優點,並在第二段舉自己在國內或國外的旅行經驗,以印證第一段的說明。

樣例

指考編號1:特優-19

Travel Is The Best Teacher

I´ve been to many countries before, and I enjoy my trip very much every time. To me, travel is the best teacher. By traveling, I can always broaden my mind and open my eyes to the things about which I had no idea before; I could also see the things which appeared only in the textbook before and that´s no doubt a wonderful experience.

Last summer, I went to Malaysia with a foundation, I used to consider it to be a poor country, but I was totally shocked at how prosperous it is! So many tall buildings and well-organized communities were right before my eyes! We also had some interaction with the local students. I found their learning attitude very active, which was very different from that of the Taiwanese students.

After my trip to Malaysia, I realized that many countries in Asia are prospering, while Taiwan seems to be going backward. I also remind myself that we should never look down on others, and we should equip ourselves with knowledge and unique perspectives, so that we may be able to be outstanding rather than being overwhelmed by the others. We should be more active in our learning and try to set up our goals.

If I hadn´t been to Malaysia, I wouldn´t have gained so many insights in these things. To me, travel is truly the best teacher.

說明:主題清楚、具體,內容豐富;重點分明、組織完整且連貫。文句結構變化豐富,幾無文法錯誤(稍有時態不一致的錯誤,例第二對的第一句Last summer...foundation後的逗號應為句號。);用字得宜(但第一段第三句中的broaden my mind應為broaden my horizons)。

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指考編號2::優-17

When you saw the romantic EiffelTower in the movies, or watched the Great Wall of China on TV, have you ever imagined that you could admire such specific constructions on the sense some day? The advantages of traveling is a lot. First, traveling can make us open our eyes, we can see the senery not through the media, but by ourselves. How wonderful that you can appreciate breathtaking senses just in front of them! Second, with the advanced education, we have known a wide variety of knowledges about many countries. Such as history, climate and even customs, but if we never been the places, it is no use to get so many informations.

During the winter vacation this year, I took a trip to Sigapore with my family. This was my first time to go abroad. In those four days, I learned a lot about this lively country, including saw the famous Merlion, visited the Indian temple ... etc. When the guide gave some informations for us at some spots, I could merge them in to the geography class easily, even could answer the questions from the guide. I was proud of that I could use the knowledge in books to the real life!

However, there is a great deal of advantages about traveling, so I sincerely recommend that you should take a travel someday!

說明:主題清楚。組織完整,重點尚分明。文法句構錯誤稍多。但用字、拼字偶有錯誤。

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指考編號3:可-13

Travel Is The Best Teacher

Many people like to read books because we can learn a lot of information from it. However, sometimes it´s not enough. For example, when the author described how spectacular the view is, we can´t feel how it is, since we fail to experience it personally. At this moment, all we have to do is go traveling. Only traveling can solve our confusion and satisfy our curious heart. When we go traveling, we can extend our sight, know things that we never know and even learn some lesson from it.

I remember that one time I took a trip to mainland china with my family. We paid a visit to WestLake. The scenery I saw really breathtaking. I liked the lake when I was a child. But I didn´t know how big it was! I was so excited that I ran aroud the lake. The astonishing view was not a book could give me. Suddenly, I saw a person throw a gabage to the lake. How could he do that! It actually broke the impression I used have on the Chinese people. Maybe it was a lesson for me.

說明:主題清楚,但部分相關敘述發展不完整,行文不甚流暢,未能連貫發展。文法及拼字錯誤,已影響部分文意之表達。

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指考編號4:可-11

Travel is the best teacher, there are three reasons why I consider it. First, we can see anything what we have never seen by traveling around the world. Second, we can realize how different the culture is between us. Last but not least, we can learn a lot of knowledge by ourselies which it have never appeared from the book.

For example, I have gone to the U.S six years ago. I have seen a lot of insterting things in the U.S. The culture is very different from us. The travel not only make me grow a great deal of knowledge but also let me had a good time there. Because of the travel, I can really see anything what I have never read from the book. In my opinion, I think travel is the best teacher of me.

說明:有主題,但部分相關敘述發展不全。有佈局,但未連貫發展。文法、拼字、用字有不少錯誤,且影響部分文意表達。

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指考編號5:差-8

Travel Is The Best Teacher

We have many travel expiences in our life, like graduate travel, camp on the mountain, visit museams….etc.Every travel have little or much knowledge in it.Even you think that you just play in traveling, in fact, you learn more about life which you can´t learn in common life.

I have ever gone to Japan once time.I learned many things in the travel.That was my first time to take the plane.I learned what I can do and what I can´t do on the plane.When we got Japan, I found first thing which is different from Taiwan is that their cars and people drive or walk on left.It shocked me because I think that worldwilde.

說明:內容雖提及與主題相關之事物,但未能就主題充分發揮。重點發展不全,第二段結尾不明顯。文法、用字、拼字錯誤多,明顯影響文意之表達。

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指考編號6:差-5

Travel is The Best Teacher

Travel is very nice.It can help us understand everywhere culture, and to meets different people.And travel also can help us to knew everything.

Have some land is we study is our book.However, somewhere is we can go to travel.We can knew differen culture, people, and life.For example, we go to travel in Japan.We can meets people become friends and chat have something is we not.

I very like to travel.I´m hope I can go to travel every country.

說明:內容太少,細節描述凌亂。全文發展,幾無組織可言。文法、用字、拼字錯誤多,嚴重影響文意表達。字數不足,另扣一分。

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 指考編號7:劣-4

Travel is the best teacher

Travel is the best teacher for me.First, travel can learn about a contry´s culture.For example, Middle East people don´t eat pig and Westness eat sweet petato.The second, travel can realize yourself and less pressureThe last one, travel can make friend with foriend.When you come home foriend friend will talk you what things happened and we don´t know in oversea first time.

I have a travel in East Taiwan, there have high mountain and good view that use me think about environment and recycle.If we haven´t recycle garbage, we would destroy that good view in East Taiwan.

說明:略涉及主題,但發展不全。雖嘗試用起承轉合詞,但因組織混亂導致文章前後不連貫。因文法、拼字錯誤過多,嚴重影響文意之表達。字數不足,另扣一分。

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 指考編號8:劣-4

Travel Is The Best Teacher

  Travel can see a lot of country and study different educated.Some country have historic site, some country have the religion, and some country have the technology etc.

說明:略提主題,但完全沒有發展,幾無內容可言。文章過短僅二句,無法判斷英文作文的能力。字數不足,另扣一分。

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 指考編號9:劣-0

Travel Is The Best Teacher

What tain make me the benefit?It is let me learn more and more folklore, and look the different view in this butiful word.

In my virgin tain.This is the summer vecation in the Japen, Japen are very confrotable, In the every where, You are improstable to find any grabeby.

In fact.I wish go to Japen again, If I can go to Japen in the November to see the rain, I just keep butiful mood in the

說明:文不對題。

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